The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbors. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter ... 1.Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly 2.. Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours 3.Suggest what should be done about the problem
Dear Sir,
I am writing
this
letter to inform you that the system which is used for collecting rubbish in my local area is not working properly and it causing many problems for me and my neighbours for the last
3 weeks. My name is Alex and I'm living in Windsor drive
. We have noticed that they do not collect the rubbish on a daily basis which creates huge garbage problems. It smells a lot which causes many health issues.
Capitalize word
Drive
Furthermore
, we tried to contact the waste management team but we didn't get any response from them. I am paying $100 every month and I am so dissatisfied with this
service. My neighbours and I organised a party last
week and there is so much garbage that needs to be collected. Proper supervision is required for this
matter.
I kindly request you to please take this
issue into consideration and help us to come out with a resolution.
Kind regards,
AlexSubmitted by shubhdeepkaur2 on
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Task Achievement
To enhance your Task Achievement score, ensure that you elaborate on how the rubbish collection system’s malfunction specifically impacts you and your neighbors. While you've mentioned health issues and dissatisfaction, providing more vivid, specific examples or consequences will strengthen your argument. For instance, describe the types of health issues faced or any incidents that occurred due to the uncollected rubbish.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, improve the organization of your letter and your idea development. Consider breaking your points into clear, distinct paragraphs, each covering a separate aspect of your complaint or suggestion. Connect your ideas using appropriate linking words or phrases to enhance readability and flow. Also, adding an introductory sentence to ease into the letter's main body might enhance overall coherence.
General
Incorporate varied sentence structures and a wider range of vocabulary to elevate your writing style. This not only demonstrates language proficiency but also keeps the reader engaged. Avoid repetition of phrases and try using synonyms or rephrasing. For example, instead of 'not working properly' repeated, consider 'malfunctioning,' 'ineffective,' or 'failing to meet standards'.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite