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Tourism is becoming increasingly important and a source of income to many countries, but its disadvantages shouldn't be overlooked . to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Revenue generated by
tourism
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 is of no doubt important, as it can help to take care of some aspects of a
country
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's budget.
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, it is needful to say that there are some other effects of
tourism
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, which may not be so beneficial. There could an increase in the crime rate
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 of vacations activities.
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, the cost a
country
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 incurs to set up attraction centres when compared to the revenue it brings may not be so profitable. Any part of the world where excursionist troop in to visit has to make a heavy investment into
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 attractions in order to make them appealing to individuals. Major expenditure is usually embarked upon by the host to develop their monuments so that they can meet up with the necessary standards. A
country
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's point of attraction may
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 be crude; not having the ability to draw individuals to it. It would
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 be necessary that these points be developed to make them appealing. Many of these countries, may not have
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 funds, to give their attraction points the face lift needed so they borrow, thereby putting the nation into serious debt, which might take future generations to pay off.
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, after investing a huge amount of capital into
tourism
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, there is the probability that it won't be as profitable as expected due to other factors which are beyond the nation's control leaving them with little or no return on investment. It is
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 worthy to note that
tourism
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 has a huge potential of increasing the crime rate in an economy.
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 of all, the credibility of a tourist cannot be completely ascertained.
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, a thief who is trying to escape from his/her
country
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 of residence
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 of the atrocity he/she committed may go to another place under the pretence of vacation, and may continue to perpetuate crime where he/she is being hosted. Thereby causing harm to the
country
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.
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,
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 foreigners are likely to have a negative influence on the natives, especially the ones with feeble minds, increasing number of criminals a
country
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 has to deal with. In conclusion, the cons of
tourism
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 as explained above are not what should be overlooked by any serious
country
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.
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, it is argued that
tourism
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 is beneficial in terms of revenue that could be generated from it, the dangers of not putting a check on the negative effects it brings to a nation could be catastrophic

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