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Some people think that being able to communicate with others online is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people, who would normally never have the chance to meet, to communicate. What are the advantages of international communication online? Are there any disadvantages to this?

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Nowadays, the youth's participation on community issue has enhanced day by day, some people's belief that massive changes in the living standard are one of the main reasons for the involvement of juveniles on social issues like alcoholism, enhancing criminal activities, lack of qualified workforce, etc.
However
, I strongly agree that if parents have less attention and less care towards their children, it will be increasing the chances of teen's involvement in
such
 social issues.
This
 is the era of modernization, people are spending more time with their work and busy in maintaining their status in
society
. Among these, they don't have adequate time to monitor children.
Consequently
, there will be high chances of the bad company of friends since they have more freedom.
This
 will insist them to involve
such
 criminal activities and enhancing the social violence by including in illegal drug, alcoholism, and smoking etc. Children are the future of the country, so parents should provide a conducive environment to boost their self-confidence and support them to get a quality education. As a teenager, they are vulnerable emotionally and not ready to take the right decision about their life. In
such
 a situation, they will not give that much importance to their studies and career.
However
, shortly,
society
 will face a lack of efficient and educated workforce,
as a result
, it will directly affect the development of the country. In conclusion, parents are the
first
 teacher of children and guardian should show the correct way and help them to be a part of
society
. Modernization is the demand of time.
However
; we should not negligence to the child's needs,
this
 will affect their growth and increase the social issues. A parent should always give priority to their children for their bright future and to create a civilized
society
.

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