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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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The World today
is facing
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is faced
will be faced
 with many problems that threatens human race and other species. Specifically, hunger is one of the most important issues that causes many people’s
death
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deaths
 every day. Even though humans have found to improve the ways of
agriculture
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, it did not help to procure a solution for hunger of humanity.
This
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 essay will argue some reasons and some solutions for the mentioned problem.
To begin
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 with, the major cause of the high rates of poorness is capitalism. To illustrate, recent reports showed that only 10% of the world’s population
has
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have
 the equal amount of income with the rest of the world.
This
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 data clearly shows that even the advancements in
agriculture
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 is not a way to overcome the inequality of people in terms of the money they receive. If governments do not focus on the equality of humanity, people will not be able to buy food or farm in their lands.
On the other hand
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, governments may take some action
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 as encouraging farming by lowering the costs
on
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of
for
 necessary materials for
agriculture
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.
For example
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, here in Turkey, the government has decreased the percentage of taxes on trucks for farmers only. By doing
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, policy-makers have intended to increase the production of local food products and so that, people would buy it for more affordable prices.
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, governments, specifically those in developing countries, ought to take some steps to increase their citizens’ wealth. In summary, only
agriculture
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 is not enough to preserve hunger and so, people’s wealth. There must be
further
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 and permanent solutions to reach better and
fast
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faster
 results. Even if it is too late to avoid from capitalism, governments may look at the strategies that have been successful in developed countries
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 as the Netherlands, Germany and so on.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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