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Some people think that government should support artists , others have an opposite opinion. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Art is an important part of national history, during the history, many nations disappeared, but their art and buildings are still here. Through Art they send us information about their lives, social organisation, and many other things.
Also
, they provide us information about the technology they used in their lives. Government should support people who will create trace of us, in
this
 part of the time. Building specific buildings and parks will make our history more rich.The Egyptian pyramids were built before 5000 years and still they are evidence of those who lived in that time, through pictures and scrolls they left us many information about their lives.
This
 kind of Art would get the attention of many tourists all across the world, which is the best way for getting a huge amount of money.
However
, there is always opposite side and opposite reasons for supporting artists. Art is not always attractive, sometimes people spent whole their life and all their money without success. These processes can be very long and very expensive,
although
 it is the great way to leave something to
next
 generations. Right now, there are all more an important things which are priority to make our lives better, rising salaries and getting better economy than investing in art.
However
, the world is facing many huge problems like poverty, crime and wars. From that point of view, there is unfortunately there is no enough space to spare a lot of money for supporting art.
Although
, it would be better to built building which will be recognized as Art of
this
 era.

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