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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries, taking a
year
 before starting
university
 to discover the world and work is regarded as an advantage. For many adolescents,
this
 habit has its benefits and drawbacks. Taking a
gap
year
 is an enriching
experience
 for many young adults. After finishing high school, many teenagers suffer from being lost and not knowing their true purpose in life.
However
, if they take time to reflect on what they love and
experience
 working or volunteering in different industries, they may find what field they like the most,
thus
, they can choose their
university
 major easily.
Furthermore
, the lack of
experience
 in life is another problem that adolescents face nowadays.
For example
, teenagers who spent their whole lives studying do not have the sufficient
experience
 required for universities, due to that, travelling and working for a
year
 can obviously enhance their knowledge.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to taking a
gap
year
. One of the most obvious drawbacks is skipping a
year
instead
 of going to
university
. Many adolescents do not favour taking
gap
 years and are already confident about their experiences and purpose in life. These young adults start
university
 before their peers who decide to take a
year
 off, leading to a difference in education levels between people of the same age. An additional issue is financing. Some young adults wish to travel to places they dreamt of visiting to get to know their culture or to volunteer there.
However
, due to the lack of money, they cannot go which leads to disappointment and frustration. To conclude, a
gap
year
 undeniably has a positive impact on adolescents, yet there will always be drawbacks in terms of the education
gap
 between them and their peers as well as financial issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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