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In some countries, some people are renting accomodation, while other are buying their own homes. Does renting accomodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?

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Deciding whether to rent or purchase a dwelling has always been an argumentative issue in some nations. Where as some people believe that renting a box is a good option others do not agree.
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 essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of both kinds of accommodations. There are some advantaged of renting an apartment.
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, It is everyone's dream to have their own
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 nowadays property rates are skyrocketing and it is difficult for a normal income person to purchase
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 for his own. So, he decides to be a tenant which he can afford and manage his other liabilities.
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, we can change the rented shack at any time if the present
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 is not significant for us. But,
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 cannot be done in
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's own home and we have to live our there.
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, rental flats are more suitable for low income and for those who don't want to live in the same is residing.
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 renting a domicile has many merits, but it is having some disadvantages as well.
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, because it is someone else's property so we are not allowed to do any modification.
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, in our own land, we can reconstruct or renovate it.
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, some landlords create many problems with the paying guest that affects the occupant a lot, whereas in our apartment there is no
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 who can impose any obligation and restrictions on the people.
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, having our own condo has its own satisfaction. In conclusion, it is taught by many people that renting a resident is a better option than owning a mansion. But they both have some pros as well as cons.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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