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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years,
space
 exploration has been a debatable issue among societies. Some people believe that investing in
this
 industry is a waste of money and the authorities should use that money in solving problems on earth
instead
. Personally, I fairly disagree with
this
 view for a number of reasons. On the one hand, people argue that the governments should not continue to fund those projects for a number of reasons. The
first
 one is that there are still so many people are living under the line of poverty on our planet.
Therefore
, it seems like putting capital in
space
 programs while thousands are dying of hunger is illogical and unreasonable.
Moreover
, there are many public services that need better improvement to enhance
life
 standard for/of generations
such
 as education, medicine, and public transportation.
On the other hand
,
although
 some people are against
this
 idea, my view is that exploring the universe benefits humanity in many aspects.
First
 of all, it is the foundation that helps human being bring technologies to a new/greater level. Not many acknowledge that multiple products and innovations used in the daily
life
 are results of
space
 research. As more satellites are orbiting around the world, providing a considerable amount of information, human are able to live in the most innovative
life
.
In addition
 to
this
,
space
 travel
also
 helps human understand more about their home. By watching the globe from the cosmos, people could study Earth sciences, weathers, climate change and many more, and thereby broaden their horizons. To sum up, I hold the opinion that the governments ought to allocate the budget appropriately so that both discovering
life
 on planets and tackling problems on the Earth are arranged reasonably.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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