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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today.

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In the current world, visual media has a huge presence in everyday life of people across the globe.
For example
,
television
 is being widely used as a supplement for
education
 by students. It agrees that books can never be replaced by
television
 as a means of learning gadget.
This
 essay will discuss about the main advantages of learning from books.
First
 of all, TV set cannot replace the books because mostly children often misuse
television
.
Television
 is the set of not only
education
 programs, it is a set of cartoons, movies and other interactive shows. It is obvious that
education
 programs are less attractive than the cartoon shows and other programs children prefer to watch. It means that while there are lots of educative and suitable programs, it is not unusual that a child would prefer to watch programs that entertain more than educating.
As a result
, by watching the entertain programs children will not learn anything, they just have a whale of time.
Moreover
, the
television
 does not focus on a particular subject, whereas books are target a specific topic, which gives opportunity to learn deeply about
this
 topic. Mostly, educational tv programs cover a wide range of topics in order to have a more viewers. It does not have any impact on kids' knowledge. If children start to read the books as a learning tool, books not only give a great amount of well-focused information for children to study and it
also
 improve reading and writing skills.
In addition
, learning by tv programs makes children more lazier rather than collecting data by reading books. In conclusion,
television
 is more entertaining than books, it cannot become a great tool for
education
 as books are for children. The book is still the most informative and appropriate learning tool and the
television
 can never replace it terms of the child’s
education
.
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