Some people believe that the best way to produce a happier society is to ensure that only small differences between the richest and the poorest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of the
society
, people start to consider how to create a more joyful
society
. Some of them hold
on
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of
an idea that narrowing the
gap
between the rich and the poor can be the best way to improve the life standard.
However
, I disagree with
this
point to some extend. I will give supporting arguments
to
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for
this
view and provide other means to create a more joyful
society
.
Initially
, there is a variety of means making a happier
society
.
For instance
, if the government could ensure the rights of citizens,
such
as fair chance of
education
, employment and health
sevices
performance of duties or provision of space and equipment helpful to others
services
, people would feel satisfied with the
society
.
Takingthe
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Taking the
Asia
for example
, it has a large
population so
Accept comma addition
population, so
that it's a bit different for the governments to preserve human
rigrhts
an abstract idea of that which is due to a person or governmental body by law or tradition or nature
rights
. Some people who
are mediate
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are mediating
-
class even
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class, even
lower, they need to obey the rule standing in a line to wait for called in hospital, whereas, some rich people who are up-class have the privilege. Even in terms of
education
, some poor family cannot enjoy the
education
rights so the children can't receive good
education
, which is not helpful to enhance the whole sense of happiness.
Movermore
at no time hereafter
Nevermore
, narrowing the
gap
between the richest and the poorest may can result in social decay to some extent. Money is a
gteat
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
motivator for most people because they can improve the life standards and gain a sense of accomplishment.
However
, the rich may not have the incentive to work harder and enterprises are
also
not willing to set
uo
spatially or metaphorically from a lower to a higher position
up
a business
,
Accept space
,
which is not
condusive
tending to bring about; being partly responsible for
conducive
to social development.
As a result
, people may be unhappy with social decay.
On the other hand
, there's no
deny
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denying
that it is useful to way to develop a happier
socety
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
. Paying tax can have important implications
to
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for
in
of
a
society
. We should
recogise
show approval or appreciation of
recognise
recognize
that the government can achieve the goal of
imcome
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
redistribution by taxation.
For example
, in many countries the high income group needs to pay
more high tax
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higher taxes
higher tax
a higher tax
, while the low income group
get
Suggestion
gets
assistance from the government, which not only can balance the
gap
in income, but
also
enhance people's happiness. Overall, I am convinced that bridge the
gap
is a great way to improve life standards, but is not the only excellent approach
,
Accept space
,
there are various means making a happier
society
.
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