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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Education is of prime importance to the children. Whether or not a child should be Homeschooled is a very personal opinion and belief of the parents. Formal knowledge starts at the age of 3 right until lifetime. Everyone should have the right to be educated.
This
 way of study
such
 as happens in the form of a brick and mortar or the education can happen in the house.
Moreover
, the choice is left with the parents to decide which of the two to opt for. In
this
 essay, we shall discuss the pros and cons of the statement. The advantage of home school would be parents have utmost control. Another would be instilling religion.
This
 study at home concept is useful for kids who are handicapped in any form. The self confidence is upheld.
In other words
, the morale of the growing adult is always high. Few parents who wish for their kid to visit the museum more often and to do more outdoor course for learning in the house. Some more parents are dissatisfied with normal schooling due to lack of solid educational institutes.
For example
. Learning on your own in the United States constitutes the education of about 3.4% of U.S. Students (approximately 2 million students).
However
, the biggest disadvantage would be the student having problems to socialize. The individual may even have problems to communicate.
Furthermore
, making friends would be a difficult task in hand. The kid would have never handled exams and homeworks. How to deal with pressure is something not taught at home. Not only is the person unprepared to face the world, but
also
 are unaware of the unknown. To conclude, way of schooling is a choice left for the parents to decide for their kid. Home learning has its own pluses.
Finally
, in my opinion everyone should have the opportunity to be in a proper school as it makes him/her
prepared
Suggestion
preparation
 for the future. 14 years of education in an institute is unmatched and unparalleled.
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