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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

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Undoubtedly, these days, it is often argued that people are not happy, neither with whatever they have, nor with whatever they will obtain. I fully agree with
this
fact
 that not at all people get full satisfaction with whatever they have and they always try to get something more and something different. In turn,
this
 essay will discuss two main reasons of
this
fact
. On the one hand, people think that as they get older, the necessities of them become more, which cause humans to convert to a miserable one.
That is
 to say that children would be completely convinced with small things and
consequently
 they are always happy, while adults are totally inverse,
thus
 adult humans have to learn from their children, quotes from psychiatrists.
For example
, no doubt, all of us in 20 years old, only needed a mobile phone, but in 30 years old, we want to buy a car and in a 40 year old, we will desire to buy a home, which can affect us to be sad.
On the other hand
, the nature of humans is totalitarian. For several millions of years, people tried to obtain more and more to discover different things and
this
fact
 affected people to evolve
such
 a monopolist. To summarize, some people are of the opinion that people would never be happy with what they have if they feel that they need more, while others are opposed to
this
 view. I am sure that humans try to add their assets more and more every day and based on
this
fact
, they will never be happy with everything that they have.
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