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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There is an opinion that
children
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 should start learning foreign
languages
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 at a young
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,
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 others believe that
people
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 should study it later in life. Some
people
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 claim that studying new material is easier in childhood, when the brain just starting to form a neural network,
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, they think that
children
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 would catch
languages
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 faster.
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, that statement is not scientifically proven, so
people
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 assume that it is easier to learn a new
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 an older
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 when an individual already has experience. In my opinion, adults can faster learn a
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 because of a longer attention span, experience and clear motivation. Some
people
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 think that learning a
language
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 at a young
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 is better. First of all, because those
children
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 will already achieve high results when their peers will just start studying
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.
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,
children
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 can study a foreign
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 at the same time as a native, through interaction with an environment.
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,
children
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 in bilingual families, in which parents speak at least two
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 on a daily basis, at the
age
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 of 6 or 7 can easily communicate with their parents.
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, some parents may start forcing their
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 to study, and that pressure may harmfully affect
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's mental health.
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, individuals should start learning
languages
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 when they want to,
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 they would have a clear motivation, and
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 actually a key to success. A grown person would understand the priorities and have a strict plan to reach a goal. In conclusion, starting studying
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 earlier will lead to a result at a young
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.
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, it is important for
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 to have free time, and studying new
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 in adulthood would be even easier because of the concentration that grown
people
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 have. In my opinion,
languages
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 should be learned at a more older
age
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.

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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure to address all parts of the prompt thoroughly. While you've discussed both views and given your opinion, delve deeper into each perspective with more detailed analysis and supporting evidence.
Task Achievement
For clearer, more comprehensive ideas, strive to elaborate on your points with more detailed supporting evidence and examples. This can include citing studies, statistics, or more extensive real-world examples that resonate with your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance coherence by ensuring ideas progress naturally from one to the next. Use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to show relationships between ideas and paragraphs more clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve cohesion, make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea. Use topic sentences effectively at the beginning of paragraphs to guide the reader through your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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