1. Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It is argued that because children spent most of their time watching
television
, their level of learning has fallen. While, I agree with the statement that
television
is a major source of distraction that keeps children away from their studies, there are other factors that are keeping them from getting higher
education
.
To begin
with, children spend most of their time in front of
television
instead
of reading books;
this
keeps them from progressing in the school.
That is
to say, nowadays,
television
is used as a source of learning tool
instead
of reading books to gain knowledge, so children spend most of their time watching
television
shows.
This
trend is lowering the
education
level in most children.
For example
, a research conducted by the University of California states that in the UK there is a 40% decline in the number of highly educated children over the
last
few years.
Although
,
television
is considered a source that prevent children from getting better
education
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educated
, other reasons
also
needs to be addressed. There are other problems that are preventing children from getting
better
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a better education
education
. One reason is poverty, my children cannot afford to pay the tuition fee or loans
that
is needed
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are needed
to get a high level of
education
. Another reason is the use of technology in the classroom distracts children from focusing on the lesson
that is
being taught
this
affects their grades.
For instance
, an article in the
Science
Suggestion
Scientific
Journal reported that most of the high school students did not progress to secondary
education
because of poor scored
this
year. In conclusion,
although
I agree that
television
plays a role in preventing children from gaining better
education
, other factors that are contributing should
also
be addressed.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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