A friend who lives in a different city has invited you to his/her daughter's 8th birthday. However, you can not accept the invitation due to some personal reasons. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: · thank him for the invitation · mention why you can not attend the birthday party · offer to meet him some other day

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Dear John, It has been so long

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since we

last

were in touch. I still remembered attending Stephanie's 7th

birthday

last

year

and it still seems just yesterday. It's amazing how fast kids grow up!

Firstly

, I would like to thank you for inviting me to your

her

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8th

birthday

. I haven't missed any of her

birthday

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till

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date.

However

, I'm afraid,

this

time I won't be able to make it. I am travelling to Canada

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the beginning of

month and will be coming back only at the end of

this

year

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is entirely needed for business

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and unfortunately, I will not have any say in

this

, as the entire trip has already been planned and funded by my company.

Although

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I won't be able to attend Stephanie's

birthday

this

year

, I was thinking of visiting you and your family during

New

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Year

holidays, if it's okay with you. Let me know

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if the plan works out and we can even go somewhere nearby for a small vacation. Give my best wishes and love to Stephanie and Bella. Will be waiting for your reply. Thank you, Amrita

Tue Mar 10 2020

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

191 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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