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Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are some people who believe that formal schooling should begin early in childhood,
on the other hand
, others argue that children should attend
school
 at the
age
 of six or seven. In my opinion, it is better to start formal schooling at an early
age
. Some people believe that children should stay at home until they are six or seven years old.
This
 idea is based on the belief that parents are children's best early teachers. Parents’ interaction with them can build their confidence, stimulate their language development and encourage them to solve problems creatively. It can
also
 be argued that some children are not mature enough for
school
 before the
age
 of six or seven. If they attend
school
 too early, they may develop behaviour problems
such
 as being easily distracted and breaking
school
 rules. Other people, including many parents, believe that an earlier
school
 starting
age
 is beneficial to children's later development. They argue that children's need for social relationships is no less than that of adults. Human beings are social by nature. Children should begin to develop their social skills through the communication with their peers and their teachers as early as possible. After the
age
 of three when young children can generally understand adults’ instructions, they should go to
school
 and become socialised.
Also
, it is reasonable that children start receiving systematically-planned education earlier in an
age
 of information explosion when people need to gain much more knowledge than people did in the past. My own view is that with a more relaxed and understanding classroom atmosphere,
school
 life should start as early as possible, which makes children better prepared for future competition in many areas.

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