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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, museums are not needed anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a true that nowadays, anyone can browse the internet about history and different cultures. While peoples' interest in museums and art has declined and can be allowed to be extinct. I differ with
this
 phenomenon and in the ensuing paragraphs I will allude to these arguments
further
.
To begin
 with, museums are showing past event and historical artefacts.
That is
 the reason why museums should not vanish. There are a lot of original photos, drawings, and special things available. By visiting ones, people see physically and understand the actual size and beauty of the artefacts or sculptures.
For example
, Maharaja Fateh Sing Museum has a huge collection of sculptures in marble and bronze.
In addition
 the fees collected from visitors of museums would increase the revenue of the government. It is not only a source of income for the government, but
also
 provides entertainment for some people.
Thus
, museums are required for people and nation.
Conversely
, the online media has all the clue about the past and our culture. It only provides photos which most of the time are not enough to understand the reality of sculptures and painting.
For instance
, Victoria Memorial, Kolkata, has Queen Victoria Statue made in the 19th century, you have to see it in person. Photos on the screen can never give an accurate idea of the size.
Moreover
, every information available on the internet may not be true as some websites put up wrong data for their benefit.
Hence
, visiting the museum can never be replaced by just reading about it online. To conclude, the internet is an easily available and free way of getting info about ones past and culture, it cannot be replaced by visiting the museums in person and it does not allow one physically.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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