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in most countries the number of plants and animals species is decreasing what is causing this ? what can be do to improve the situation?

Decreasing population of many plants and animal
species
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 has raised global concerns during the past several years. Several scientific studies have proven that *anthropogenic* factors
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 as deforestation, pollution, and global warming are *primary* factors behind the rapidly falling population of these
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 since the *dawn* of the twentieth century, humans have *exploited* natural resources for economic progress. Huge *swathes* of trees have been cleared to construct cities, collect raw material for various industries, and build factories and dams.
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 large scale *residential* and commercial projects have not only led to the *elimination* of several animal and
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species
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 but
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 a reduction in the population of many others
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 as the Tiger and Rhinoceros
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, air, water, and land pollution caused by human activities have led to a reduction in the number of house sparrows that were a common sight a few years ago.
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, global warming has led to an increase in the Earth’s temperature at a few places and fall at other places.
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, animals
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 as the polar bear and snow leopard are endangered
species
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 on the verge of extinction. Protecting and preserving animal and
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species
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 requires close coordination of individuals, institutions, private companies, and governments. While government policy and programs for reducing deforestation, promoting afforestation, and regulating *vehicular* pollution are important, companies
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 need to act environmentally
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responsibly
 by following green practices. Individuals
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 should abandon any activity that has a high carbon footprint In conclusion, if animal and
plant
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species
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 are not preserved, it will lead to ecological imbalance and make earth unsustainable. Acting responsibly, we all need to unite and protect and
plant
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species
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 for our future generation.

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