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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate five reasons why
people
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 use to
work
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
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car
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cars
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.
Overall
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,
people
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who
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apply
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choose cycling to
work
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, because
of
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apply
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they consider health and fitness
as well as
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 no parking problems.
Nonetheless
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, humankind who prefer to travel by
car
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,
they
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apply
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want comfort
together
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with
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apply
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faster than cycling. The first chart which shows reasons for cycling
,
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 gave notably 30% to health, fitness and to less pollution. 15
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percent
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per cent
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 purpose of the no parking problems. 13% of
people
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 who use
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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to
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apply
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reason
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the reason
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 of no costs.
Additionally
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, 12
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percent
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per cent
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 is
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the cause
a cause
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cause
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caused
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of
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by
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 driving faster than
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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.
Furthermore
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, the largest percentage of
car
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 users consider 40
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percent
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per cent
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 to
cozy
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cosy
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. 14%
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people
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of people
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 choose
the
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apply
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cars as it is
need
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needed
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 to carry things to
work
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. In spite of
this
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, there are some
people
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 who take into account
distance
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the distance
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 to
work
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, with 21%. Undoubtedly, 14
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percent
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per cent
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 reason is faster
of
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apply
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driving than cycling. In comparison, the percentage of
car
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 safety
less
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is less
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 than
other
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the other
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 four cause's percents, namely it shows only 11%.
Having accumulated
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 majority of
people
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 who cycle to
work
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, do
this
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 for
their
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apply
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health reason.
In addition
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, humankind who travel by
car
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want
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wants
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 to have more comfort over the longer distance.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work, car, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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