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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate five reasons why
people
 use to
work
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
car
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cars
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.
Overall
,
people
who
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apply
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choose cycling to
work
, because
of
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they consider health and fitness
as well as
 no parking problems.
Nonetheless
, humankind who prefer to travel by
car
,
they
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apply
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want comfort
together
with
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apply
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faster than cycling. The first chart which shows reasons for cycling
,
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 gave notably 30% to health, fitness and to less pollution. 15
percent
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per cent
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 purpose of the no parking problems. 13% of
people
 who use
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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to
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apply
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reason
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the reason
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 of no costs.
Additionally
, 12
percent
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per cent
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 is
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the cause
a cause
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cause
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caused
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of
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by
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 driving faster than
bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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.
Furthermore
, the largest percentage of
car
 users consider 40
percent
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per cent
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 to
cozy
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cosy
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. 14%
people
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of people
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 choose
the
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apply
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cars as it is
need
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needed
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 to carry things to
work
. In spite of
this
, there are some
people
 who take into account
distance
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the distance
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 to
work
, with 21%. Undoubtedly, 14
percent
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per cent
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 reason is faster
of
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apply
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driving than cycling. In comparison, the percentage of
car
 safety
less
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is less
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 than
other
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the other
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 four cause's percents, namely it shows only 11%.
Having accumulated
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 majority of
people
 who cycle to
work
, do
this
 for
their
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apply
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health reason.
In addition
, humankind who travel by
car
want
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wants
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 to have more comfort over the longer distance.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work, car, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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