Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Shopping is an activity in which customers browses the available good and services presented by one or more retailers. It is often argued that, buying clothes is the most common idle hours entertainment for most of the youngsters around the globe. The reason behind

this

trend is the huge influence of social media and fast fashion on the teenagers and adults. According to my perspective,

this

is a negative development and,

this

essay will explain the points to justify my statement.

To begin

with, there is no doubt that young generation is greatly influenced by the social media influence. Alongside, social media, fast fashion brands are manipulating young adults to buy more and, because of

this

, they start to purchase unnecessary items which they actually do not need or want, but just for the show off and peer pressure they purchase it.

For instance

, when they bought things needlessly either they end up throwing it in the garbage or donating it.

Additionally

, the clothes which fast fashion brands make are usually of cheap material which does not

last

long.

Secondly

, when youngsters go out for shopping, they need cash. But, they do not know how to spend that money wisely, and most of the time, they will either run out of the cash, before they spend it on the right things which they actually need or, end up in huge debts. Because, not all the young adults come from rich families, but because of the domination of brands and fast trend and marketing of the items leave them to buy it needlessly. In conclusion, more and more youngsters now spend their time shopping because they want to follow the latest style rends and to impress their friends.

However

, it is a negative development as it is a complete waste of time, energy and most importantly money.

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leisure activity
consumer culture
material possession
social experience
disposable income
tech-savvy
convenience
fashion trends
overconsumption
economic stimulation
retail industry
materialism
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consumer spending
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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

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Completeing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. Other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.