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Around the world, more adults can work from home more children can study from home as computer technologies become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the automation is improving in all streams. Worldwide it is possible for workers to do a job as well as students can learn from home, because of the low price of
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 technologies and more reachable. I largely think it is a positive improvement. My reasons are justified
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. Discussing the positive impacts, the foremost benefit of
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 is the
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 saving method. In recent days,
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 managing is very crucial part of life. In
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 situation
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 can serve the purpose of saving
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 of employees and learners.
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, it is
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 cheap, so go to
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 place or tuition on a daily basis is more expensive than consuming consuming
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. The children's tuition fees are high in cost so uses
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 as a teacher is cheaper.
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,
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 safe and useful for physically challenged people. People who cannot go at
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 place and study place they can learn or
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 from the house. In
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 way, they do not feel disadvantaged by having that type of physical situation.
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, all the types of information can be gained by the
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 and using it can make the person perfect in every stream.
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, every coin has two sides and
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 development can
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 cause the health issues,
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 as eye problem, due to study or
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 for a long
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 on
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a computer
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 can make eyes weak.
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, teaching method of human is far better and efficient than the
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, after all, human create
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, so children can learn things very easily from teachers than the
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. To conclude, there are several merits related to
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, money, safety etc. But there are some certain drawbacks to the understanding of students and health of users.
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 the merits outweigh the demerits.

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