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Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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People think teaching students the
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 of their own country will be better
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 of other countries. While I accept that students should be encouraged
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 works of their own
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, I
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 believe that studying foreign
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 is equally fundamental. On the one hand, when students are acquiring knowledge about their own
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 by learning
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 in their school, they are likely to enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizons about
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 and tradition in their country.
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, it helps locals improve their patriotism and feel take pride in their
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.
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, national literary works to give students an insight into their own
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.
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, through traditional
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, namely fairy tales, legends and fables, students can become familiar with their traditions, native terms and
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 national values which have been passed down from generation to generation.
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, they will naturally develop a sense of national identity and patriotism.
On the other hand
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, studying foreign
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 is
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 advantageous for the following reasons.
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 with, it gives learners opportunities to expand their horizons by showing them a bigger picture of the outside world. Having access to foreign historical events and cultures, commentaries on politics, society, and stereotypes in
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 from countries abroad will foster students’ awareness of the diversity of the world.
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, the students will be equipped with a broader range of knowledge to help them be more prepared for the globalized world that we are living in today. To be more specific, the students will have a grasp of the
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 of foreign countries and how to adapt themselves in terms of manners, customs or behaviours if they live in that new environment or dealing with foreigners. In conclusion, it seems to me that there is a need to teach both local and foreign
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 at schools so that students can develop comprehensively.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Native literature
  • Cultural identity
  • Heritage
  • Traditions
  • National pride
  • Language skills
  • Idiomatic expressions
  • Engagement
  • Relatability
  • Broaden perspectives
  • Cultural awareness
  • Open-mindedness
  • Literary heritage
  • Bias
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Global community
  • Domestic vs. international literature
  • Cultural nuances
  • Sense of belonging
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