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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The majority of people argue that especially wild animals have no place in the 21st century,
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 being the vital part of our planet. Under
this
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 circumstance they possess the belief spending money to preserve animals is total wastage for both budgets and resources and they have almost nothing to contribute to human progress. I totally disregard
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 point of view and strongly suggest that humanity must do everything to protect animal in all ways. The
first
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 thing to remember it is completely ludicrous and absurd the way of thinking that there is no place for living wild animals. Despite the fact that it is the 21st century and the world or technology is getting more and more developed, there are still areas on Earth that are inaccessible to humans and uninhabitable, which can be considered a paradise for animals.
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, if it is realizable to live with animals in
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 a vast world, killing them and causing the extinction of them is solely a matter of human stupidity and selfishness.
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, as I emphasized above, according to many people’s opinions, existing of wild animals is a waste of resources and the budget of
government
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the government
.
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, living animals with people side by side and under the same planet have a countless amount of benefits
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 of disadvantages. To preserve animals, people must not destroy plants, jungles, forest which all of these are the main attribute for to keep the balance of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
ecosystems
an ecosystem
.
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, each year governments allocate a certain amount of money for drugs that are harmful to human life and health,
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 as cigarettes, alcohol beverages, tobaccos and so on. If these revenues were spent on protecting animals, we would achieve a more beneficial result and a healthier humanity. In conclusion, after having discussed the most pertinent points of the issues, I feel that the only logical conclusion is not only governments, but
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 people should do their best to save animals and must not allow the extinction of endangered animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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