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Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #people #environment
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Our industry and producing have affected the
environment
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 to a great degree. Governments in different countries need to help the
environment
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.
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, some people think it is our own responsibility to look after the
environment
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. I am positively to
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 idea. Above all, the earth belongs to all species in the world. It is not some single person or organization’s responsibility to take care of it. Every one of us needs to start protecting the
environment
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 because we are obliged to do that. Whereas, the government is weaker compared with us. It can never cover everything if the public does not move.
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, it is easier for us than the authority to protect the local
environment
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. Under the instruction of the government, we can easily help the local
environment
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. According to some researches, people who do not drive cars will reduce the omit by a large amount. Some people in America
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 proposed lots of very good ideas to reduce the pollution and help the climate.
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, using clean fuels
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 as hygiene, electricity, rather than coals, bio-fuels, and so on.
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, someone thinks it is eco-friendly to go to work by bicycle. I think all of the solutions are practical only if every one of us start it. There is no
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 an authority in the world that can give a direct order that people have to protect the world, but the public need to realize the significance and help it. In conclusion, people should take care of their local
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 by themselves and the government should teach and instruct them to do.
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