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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is suspected that the quality of
health
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 will degrade in the upcoming time. I completely agree with the statement and in
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 essay I will elucidate some the reasons in support of the argument.
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 with, in my opinion, one of the reasons for poor
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 expectancy in the upcoming time is
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. There is no scepticism in the fact that
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 is rising. The air, water and land is being contaminated by the pollutants released through various sources in our ecosystem. Due to
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this
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 pollutants the number of
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 hazards is rising exponentially and average life expectancy is declining. According to a report by Harvard University, It is estimated that the number of cancer patients has increased by 125% in
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 decade in comparison to the previous decade and
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 is the major culprit for it. Another reason, I believe that
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 will decline in the future is due to increasing dependence upon gadgets and machines. Nowadays people are more dependent upon machines than before for their day to day tasks.
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, they make a lesser effort by themselves and spend more of a sedentary lifestyle.
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, they do not even do regular exercise or cycling and walking and use cars and scooters to travel. Due to
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, the number of patients with diseases like obesity, heart disease are increasing and It is expected that if these habits are not mended than these
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 problems will become genetic and carry forward to our upcoming generation. In conclusion, I would reiterate that owing to
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 and dependence over machines and if step are not taken, it is highly unlikely that the future would be healthy.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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