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With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#rise #popularity #internet #newspapers
It is believed by some individuals that with the increase of the modern devices and
internet
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the internet
,
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,
newspapers will soon disappear and become only a thing related to the past time.I
completetly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 agree with
this
 statement and the reasons of it will be explained before providing a conclusion.
To begin
 with
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it is undeniable that the development of cutting-edge technology changes people’s lifestyle and make a lot of things easier for them.By the help of
internet people
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the internet people
 can get a great range of
information
 easily and to my mind, acquiring
information
 from
internet
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the internet
 rather than newspapers is more effective
,
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,
comfortable and beneficial method.The
first
 reason is that if someone read something from
newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
,
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,
it can be limited.I mean that in
this
 case
this
 person may accumulate
information
 to some extend
,
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,
but not widely.
In
contrast using
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contrast, using
internet
 in order to read news gives people a chance to read all newspapers from different parts of the world at the same time.
Thus
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am convinced that people will prefer to use
Internet
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the Internet
 as the source of
information
 rather than newspapers
.
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.
Additionally
,
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,
it can be said that reading newspaper in everywhere is difficult
,
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,
but
Internet
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the Internet
 can be used in different devices
such
 as mobile phones
,
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,
laptops
.
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.
netbooks
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Netbooks
 and they are
easyly
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
 portable
,
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,
especially phones.At the same time
,
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,
conventional newspapers are
mede
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 from trees and when people stop using traditional
newspapers they
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newspapers, they
 can
also
 prevent deforestation to some
extend and
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extend, and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am of the opinion that people will
chose
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choose
this
 way.
that
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That
 is because they are in the search of more alternative ways
for
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of
 making their life better and keep our environment. In conclusion
,
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,
it seems to me that in future we will remember traditional paper newspapers only the memory of past and İnternet will replace the newspapers as a reliable
,
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,
wide and comfortable
information
 source for these mentioned reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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