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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning discuss both the sides and give your opinion?

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While some people opine that
intelligence
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 is inherited, others insist that it can be acquired through learning. In my opinion,
intelligence
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 is both innate and acquired. There are certainly some innate aspects
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of
intelligence
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. That explains why children taught in the same class acquire different grades. Another interesting aspect of
intelligence
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 is that people have different skills or aptitude.
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, some people have a natural flair for writing, singing or drawing. They can excel in these
areas even
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areas, even
 if they do not receive formal training. Some students can solve arithmetic sums more easily and there are
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 children who have a natural aptitude for science. What’s more,
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 a number of people study science or arts, only a handful of them emerge as successful scientists or artists. Obviously, they have certain skills that others do not possess and that probably explains why
intelligence
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 is innate. On the flip side, there are certainly some aspects of
intelligence
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 that can and should be acquired and developed.
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, just because someone is born ‘intelligent’ there is no guarantee that they will achieve great things in life. In almost all cases, they need training and practice. If
intelligence
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 was truly an innate quality, there would be no need for
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 training. There are
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 examples of many people who became
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a great success
 in their life in spite of getting poor grades in school. Their
intelligence
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 certainly is not ‘innate’.
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Rather, it
 is something they acquired through learning and practice. To conclude, after
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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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 both sides of the
argument it
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argument, it
 is not hard to see that
intelligence
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 is both innate and acquired. All of us are born with certain levels of
intelligence
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. If an intelligent person is born in a conducive environment and receive adequate levels of external stimuli they can produce outstanding results. At the same time, someone born with only average levels of
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 can
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 achieve great things through learning and hard work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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