The media has become too influential in peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's fast-paced
world
, the
media
and the internet play a crucial role in our day-to-day lives.
while
some believe that social
media
could waste our time and compromise privacy, I contend that
media
could have both pros and cons and
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will elaborate on my opinion. On the one hand, some argue that the
media
could be detrimental to human society. They state that a large part of our time in the day is devoted to social
media
.
As a result
, we forget to do other work or activities like hanging out with friends and doing physical activities.
Although
people
share their holidays and weekend activities with other
people
by posting photos or videos on social
media
, they seriously sacrifice their privacy and share anything of their lives, even private ones, with strangers.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that the latest
news
is released by social
media
at the moment. In the past,
people
all over the
world
waited for the morning newspaper or cable TV channel to be aware of what was happening across the globe. Fortunately, nowadays, thanks to social
media
such
as X, Facebook and Instagram, the
news
spreads all over the
world
in a second and there is no difference between
people
from various countries.
For example
, the
news
about COVID-19 in China was broadcast all over the
world
quickly and other countries had a chance to do some precautionary acts in order to prevent
this
virus.
In addition
, we can change our social
media
's privacy and policy setting to prevent misuse.
Thus
, by social
media
and the internet, it is much easier than in the past to know about a variety of
news
and events, like political, social and economic ones. In conclusion,
while
some
people
argue that the
media
should be banned and restricted
due to
some reasons, regardless of all these causes, I strongly believe in the freedom to use the
media
for any purpose, because it is capable of increasing our awareness about the
world
's latest
news
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • sensationalism
  • conglomerates
  • biased
  • misinformation
  • exacerbating
  • constant exposure
  • unrealistic standards
  • homogenization
  • critical thinking
  • foster
  • community engagement
  • social change
  • public opinion
  • perceptions
  • corporate interests
  • mental health issues
  • traditional cultural
  • educational sources
  • responsibly
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