The media has become too influential in peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's fast-paced
world
, the media
and the internet play a crucial role in our day-to-day lives. while
some believe that social media
could waste our time and compromise privacy, I contend that media
could have both pros and cons and i
will elaborate on my opinion.
On the one hand, some argue that the Change the capitalization
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media
could be detrimental to human society. They state that a large part of our time in the day is devoted to social media
. As a result
, we forget to do other work or activities like hanging out with friends and doing physical activities. Although
people
share their holidays and weekend activities with other people
by posting photos or videos on social media
, they seriously sacrifice their privacy and share anything of their lives, even private ones, with strangers.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that the latest news
is released by social media
at the moment. In the past, people
all over the world
waited for the morning newspaper or cable TV channel to be aware of what was happening across the globe. Fortunately, nowadays, thanks to social media
such
as X, Facebook and Instagram, the news
spreads all over the world
in a second and there is no difference between people
from various countries. For example
, the news
about COVID-19 in China was broadcast all over the world
quickly and other countries had a chance to do some precautionary acts in order to prevent this
virus. In addition
, we can change our social media
's privacy and policy setting to prevent misuse. Thus
, by social media
and the internet, it is much easier than in the past to know about a variety of news
and events, like political, social and economic ones.
In conclusion, while
some people
argue that the media
should be banned and restricted due to
some reasons, regardless of all these causes, I strongly believe in the freedom to use the media
for any purpose, because it is capable of increasing our awareness about the world
's latest news
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