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Some people think that it would be better if the whole family (uncles, aunts and grandparents) are involved in bringing up children rather than only parents. What is your opinion?

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It is thought by a few individuals that children grow up better in their
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life
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lives
, if he or she spend
life
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 in joint families compared to the individual one. I profoundly agree with the former part of a statement, as up brining in joint family is more effective, because the major reason behind
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, they are a bunch of family members to teach adolescent from their experiences children will learn the traditions and other important aspects of
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, the joint family has a vast role to build children and make the children strong for any field of
life
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. As grandparents has their own experiences to share and protect the children in many difficult ways, while telling their story of parents.
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 uncle and aunts help children to learn a new way of making think easier and stand in the front row in
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 competitive world. The other clear thought to live with joint family, children has a broad mindset for taking challenges,
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, if anyone in the family retires from the Army, so he has many stories to share of fearless, brave and adventurous and these real stories would make strong and bold to the child.
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, today’s lifestyle, whereas, in nuclear family has no proper time to spend with youth and as both the husband and wife are working and most of the couples are working hand and they are keeping the children in the day care or alone in the house and children lacking for parental guidance and love too. To conclude
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, we should live together with complete family as it is utmost for children, while grandparents
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 need their son and daughter in-law to take care of them, so at the
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 we come to
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 thought the ones should live in joint family if it is possible.
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