style which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged? To what extent do you agree?

The pace of life has increased in recent years
as a result
of that, many health predicaments have occurred,
for instance
: stress, work-pressure and depression etc. Some people claim that the health problems caused by a modern lifestyle can be treated only by conventional
medicine
.
This
essay will argue that the illnesses due to current lifestyle are not genuinely healed by
folk
medicine
. Many people have thought that conventional cure is the only method to treat health problems related to a modern lifestyle for many various reasons.
Firstly
, many people had tried scientific
medicine
, which is prescribed either by a family doctor or specialist physician, and they did not feel better and vice versa.
Secondly
, some people have religious thoughts that certain species of flowers will cure them more than modern
medicine
, and that aids to enhance their mental wellness.
For instance
, when my brother had come after a long day’s work, he always have had a headache and
depression which
Accept comma addition
depression, which
is healed
Suggestion
are healed
only by drinking tea with a certain type of flowers.
On the other hand
, there is a fact in scientific
medicine
“The personal experiences is not a rule and it still unscientific idea unless it was proven by practical method” that means
folk
medicine
is not a scientific field.
Moreover
, many of cures prescribed by a traditional
medicine
can kill the person who had them.
For example
, my friend who is working in a government hospital, told me that he has seen many people were dying due to conventional
medicine
. Overall, treating by a
folk
medicine
is not a science, and can be extremely hazards to the wellness.
This
essay argued that why some people prefer
folk
medicine
to heal their sickness, and the hazardous influences of that kind of
medicine
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with individuals who select conventional
medicine
, and I recommend everyone to see a specialist physician and commit with the doctor's instructions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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