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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extend do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The prevalence of international
exchange
 program has been a growing concern over the past few years. While there are some drawbacks of
this
 trend, I would argue that there are far
more
Suggestion
More
 benefits for teenagers at the school.
This
 essay examines different aspects of
this
 issue. On the one hand, the main disadvantage of the trend towards foreign
exchange
 program is that there is a language barrier for youngsters which makes the foreign visits be worthless for them.
Moreover
, the cultural shock should be considered because of the difference from national customs and
maner
social deportment
manners
manner
 behaviours. Just take one example, schools in Germany offer their students to visit Thailand during summer holidays. Teenagers may experience on jet lag and hot weather which make them be exhausted to continue the trip. As the result, there will be
waste
Suggestion
a waste
 of money and effort for the international
exchange
 visits.
On the other hand
, despite the negatives mentioned above, I support the view that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, by attending the trip, youngsters can get the real experiences on subjects that they are interested in
such
 as History.
This
 leads to the fact that their knowledge is
enrich
Suggestion
enriched
 and boot up their motivation on studying.
Secondly
,
this
exchange
 trip can encourage their independent learning which will nurture their studying
habit
Suggestion
habits
 in the higher education.
Finally
, the network can be
broden
physically and forcibly separated into pieces or cracked or split
broken
broadened
 by connecting oversea students and can acquaint with good values from them to upgrade themselves. In conclusion, while I
recogise
show approval or appreciation of
recognise
recognize
 the possible disadvantages of international
exchange
 visits, I consider it to be a positive trend overall.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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