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Grand parents are often taking care of the grand children, what are the advantages and disadvantages of it.

#parents #care #children
In
this
 fast paced
life
, where parents are working dawn-to-dust to clinch the materialist pleasure and it is the major reason that nowadays the time parent should give their children is shrinking and
hence
 in current trend, grandchildren have taken
care
 by the grandparents. In my essay, I will shed some light on the merits and demerits of
this
 trend.
First
 of all, Grand parents are the trusted
care
 givers. There are many advantages that children are taken
care
 by grandparents.
First
 and most important, grandparents have experience to raise the children as they raised their and it leads to better parenting skills and inculcate better skills in juveniles like give respect to elders, take responsibility along with take initiatives.
Secondly
, Childrens rose by grandparents have many different aspect to view the
life
 and
this
 guide them to find solutions to
life
 problems easily as well as provide strength to face the problems bravely.
Lastly
, Children get companies to share their thoughts and thinking to the grandparents
thus
 improves bonding between them. Advantages of
this
 trend have
also
 affected the parents as it offers peace of mind to them because of it they can have better professional
life
. Though each and every coin has two sides, every aspect comes with its own advantages and disadvantages. The children rose by grandparents have strong bonding with them as they habituated to share their thoughts and feelings to them and it diminishes the bonding between children and parents. Meanwhile, at a certain point in
life
 children will lose grandparents at that point of time they face difficulty share with parents and it may lead to the serious mental health issues in early age.
For example
, depression and anxiety. To recapitulate, Grand parents take
care
 of their grandchildren lead professional growth to parents as well as providing academic achievements along with overall development
to
Suggestion
for
 children, But at later it might cost mental health problems in children.
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