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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do they sleep less? What effect does it have on an individual and on society?

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In many countries, people have started sleeping less than they used to. In my opinion, I believe that getting minimum sleep is owing to hectic
work
 schedules for some and
entertainment
 for others.
Firstly
, the prominent reason that many people get less sleep nowadays than they used to get previously is due to their
work
 schedule.
In other words
, to keep up with the deadlines of projects at
work
, many people get
work
 home to complete their projects on time,
thus
 working late at
night
.
This
 has now become a very common scenario for many working-class people to use extra time, which they need at
work
 from their
night
 hours and
hence
 sleeping for a few hours. Another factor that adds to
this
 sleep deprivation in a lot of countries is
entertainment
. As people are busy with their
work
 whilst the day, they need some sort of relaxation from the stress in their daily life, so many
entertainment
 sources are available,
such
 as
night
 clubs, casinos, cinemas and many more.
As a result
 of these
night
 clubs and casinos, many people utilize their
night
 hours dancing and gambling and
thus
 using their time in
entertainment
 at
night
 rather than sleep. Lack of sleep has a detrimental effect on individuals as well as society. The individuals with insomnia are always at many health risks, and some of the immediate effects being laziness, lethargy, disinterest, and lack of concentration which is harmful to them as well as society.
For instance
, a person with sleep problems can be dangerous while driving, as he cannot concentrate on the signals as well as the intersection and
thus
, being a threat to his life as well as others on the road. In conclusion, sleeping for fewer hours can be very dangerous for the health of the individual and can bring catastrophic effects on society as the lack of concentration and awareness of their surroundings so, can be a problem for others too.
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