In some countries, small central shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh its advantages?

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Over the past few years, the focus of urban planning has been how to address overpopulation. To
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end, one of the measures is to relocate businesses in urban areas, which has resulted in bigger stores in the outskirts replacing smaller ones clustered in city
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, raises two concerns, namely the closure of small stores in urban
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and a potential increase in car use as more people need access to suburban shopping. While these concerns are valid, I believe the advantages of having shops away from town
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far outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, a growing preference for large stores in the suburbs could cause a few problems.
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, small shops in the
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of town may struggle to survive. Properties in the city command a premium, which directly eats into
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owners’ margins and makes it difficult for them to compete with stores situated
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away where rent is only a fraction of what it typically is in ventral locations.
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speculate that the desire to
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at suburban stores could prompt citizens to buy their own cars, which could exacerbate congestion, and by extension, air pollution.
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the scenarios describe above indeed look bleak, I am convinced that consumers wanting to
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at stores outside of town should be viewed as a welcome development. While it may cost smaller stores are scarcer than ever before, which means if people continue to
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in these areas, there will be no hope of improving the traffic situation here,
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a rise in car ownership technically could happen
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of shoppers wanting easy access to out-of-town stores,
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possibility is far-fetches at best. Cars are prohibitively expensive, and it is hard to believe that consumers can justify the costs of owning a private vehicle just do that they can go shopping, not to mention how developed public transport has become which
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renders buying a car redundant. In conclusion, while there may be some immediate setbacks to people being drawn to shopping options outside the city, I would argue that the upside of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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