The government’s investment in arts, music and theater is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Some people argue that the
government
's investment in arts
, theatre
and music is a money
waste. The government
's funds should be spent on other public services. I completely disagree with this
statement because , despite the importance of other public services, the government
should not ignore the importance of arts
and culture
.
Practising arts
, theatre
and music requires creativity and the government
should spend a certain amount of money
in these sectors
. Spending money
in this
is sectors
is not a waste of money
because if these sectors
get the government
's funds, the artists
can arrange shows, concerts and exhibitions. The money
they will earn from these events can be paid to the government
in return through taxes. For example
, artists
in India, every year pay higher taxes from the earnings of art exhibitions and stage shows.
Moreover
, the government
should patronize arts
and culture
because it makes the young generation interested in practising arts
and culture
. Those children and young adults who are interested in becoming artists
or musicians should be encouraged because not everyone wants to be a doctor or engineer. However
, there is a misconception in society that artists
and musicians cannot earn more. If the government
invests in these sectors
, people will be more encouraged to come to these professions. For instance
, in Bangladesh, when the government
started providing funding for theatre
, a significant number of young people joined in theatre
and they said that it was their dream to become a theatre
artist.
In conclusion, the government
's funding for the improvement of arts
and culture
helps the government
to earn taxes. Moreover
, the young generation will be interested in becoming an artist or musician if the government
invest in this
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Ensure your introduction has a clear thesis statement. Consider adding, for instance, 'This essay will argue why investing in arts and culture can be beneficial not only for the artistic community but for society as a whole.'
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Work on better organizing paragraphs to contribute to a smoother flow. Use clear topic sentences and transitional phrases to improve readability and cohesiveness.
clear comprehensive ideas
Expand on your ideas more fully. Provide more detailed explanations on how government funding benefits the arts and how this support is crucial. Back your statements with more convincing arguments.
relevant specific examples
Excellent use of specific examples, such as artists paying higher taxes, and the positive impact on young people in Bangladesh.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main argument and aligns well with the essay's overall stance.
supported main points
Main points addressed are well-supported with relevant arguments, making your stance clear.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite