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some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Modern innovative
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Modern, innovative
 technologies have shaped the world differently today. Some are of the opinion that new inventions have caused more issues than solutions. I completely disagree with the statement and shall discuss my reasons for the same,
further
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 in my essay. Advocates like
my self
reflexive form of "me"
myself
 believe that.
innovations
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Innovations
has broughtabout
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have brought about
has brought about
 a positive change in our lives, with innovations like internet one can connect with people across the globe,
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 it has made information available
on
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at
 your finger tips. Another particularly good example
are
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is
 the innovations in the field of robotics
for example
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, many households now use robot
vaccum
the absence of matter
vacuum
 cleaner at home, thereby cutting cleaning time and
efford
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
effort
 by half.
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, people who hold opposing view, are of the opinion that modern day inventions
has created
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have created
 new problems in the society. One good example of
this
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 is lack of privacy due to
usage
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the usage
 of social media wherein, people tend to post pictures without the approval of people in it.
Also
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, it
has generated
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generates
 unnecessary stress among teenagers as they struggle to keep with their peers through social media. Having discussed both
view points
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoints
, I would like to conclude that
although
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 modern day inventions have their demerits their advantages outweighs their disadvantages.
For instance
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, by taking measures like taking caution in sharing information one can decrease the negative effects of new inventions like social media and one can use it to
ones
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one's
 advantage.
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