Some people say that music is the good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is often argued that
music
is the inspiration to get people more close closed even they are different about cultures or ages. I completely agree with
this
opinion.
First
of all,
music
plays a role as a language and it has a certain impact
to
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in
on
currently
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current
social life. There are many different nations in all around the world, they
also
speak many different languages. And every of them uses their language to create the songs which have the beautiful lyrics and melodies by their typical cultures and language. All of
this
creating
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creates
their
music
and
then
being disseminated widely.
For example
, in Vietnam, there are many kinds of feature
music
such
as Cheo, Quan Ho,
Cai
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Luong. It is considered as the intangible cultural heritages which need to
preserved
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preserve
. Through
this
kinds
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kind
of
music
, foreign tourists can more understand about Vietnam as well as Vietnamese people. Thereby, we can disseminate Vietnam culture with foreign tourists. Another point to consider is that people can express their thoughts as well as their emotions through the lyrics and melodies of the song.
Music
is not only for
entertainment but
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entertainment, but
also
for disseminating thoughts, ideas or even spirit. Thereby, the space of generation will not so far.
For instance
, parents can understand their children through the
music
their kids usually listen to. They may know when their child upset, when their child happy.
Then
they can confide and more easily understand each other.
In addition
,
many many
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many
years ago, in the wars, the composers encouraged the spirit of their soldiers by creating the songs with the eloquent melodies and close lyrics. Up to now, every time we listen to
this
type, we cannot help shivering because the songs make us remember their glorious victories. In conclusion, once
again I
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again, I
want to emphasize I totally agree that
music
is one of the most important factor to promote people get closer together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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