These days, an increasing number of people in many cities know little about their neighbors and do not have a sense of community. What do you think are the causes and what solutions can you suggest?

It is true that more people live in an isolated environment than ever before where they do not belong to any groups or bother to get to know someone. There are a variety reasons to cause
this
, but certain steps can definitely be taken to tackle these problems. In my opinion, there are main three factors to be blamed for the isolation among people living in urban areas.
Firstly
, people tend to communicate with others via
internet
Suggestion
the internet
and social apps
such
as Facebook and Twitter. The internet makes our lives more convenient where people can purchase anything or expression their opinion easily, so they might feel that it is not necessary for face to face communication.
Secondly
, it is quite common that there were no organised communities in different living areas within cities.
Hence
, it would be quite difficult for people to meet up together, sharing their hobbies and life stories, leading to lack of sense of belonging to any community.
Lastly
, people living in urban cities normally have a fast pace life and work long hours. After a long working day, all they need is possibly only a peaceful time without any interruption. The isolation between people can certainly be tackled by some steps. I believe the changes should be started with
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. Schools or
government
should educate people and provide them more places to enjoy life, and they should be encouraged to go out rather than staying on Facebook or Twitter all day.
Furthermore
,
government
should support the view of setting up local communities involving fish club, dancing clues in each living area where people have somewhere to go and communicate with. At the same time,
government
should
also
introduce a law to restrict companies which require
employee
Suggestion
employees
an employee
the employee
to work
such
long hours.
Therefore
, they will have more time to fulfil their social lives. In conclusion, people living in cities will continue to face the problem where no one pays much
attentions
Suggestion
attention
to others unless people are encouraged to go offline and
government
encourages people to communicate with each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • neighbors
  • interaction
  • communication
  • busy and fast-paced lifestyles
  • technology
  • social media
  • community events
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community centers
  • clubs
  • block parties
  • potluck dinners
  • online platforms
  • engagement
  • sense of belonging
  • inclusivity
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