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Some people think it is a good idea for students to take a gap year to travel or gain work experience before starting university. Others think gap years are a waste of time. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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In recent years, taking a
gap
year
 has aroused a controversial issue among people around the world. Some consider it a good idea for learners to travel or obtain work
experience
 while others support their contrast thought. In my perspective, I recommend that students should take a
gap
year
 before
college
. On the one hand, students should spend a
gap
year
 touring or gaining job
experience
 to widen their knowledge, which would help them with a
future
 career.
In particular
, travelling would provide them with real
experience
 about diverse cultures
such
 as food, costumes or festivals around the world, which they
just learnt
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had just learned
 from the classrooms, textbooks or films in the past.
This
experience
 would not only help students to avoid building bias toward a place or
people but
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people, but
also
 build new perspectives about them.
Besides
, gaining work
experience
 before
college
 would contribute to their resume and help them have more chances when they apply for a well-paid job after graduation.
On the other hand
, some argue that taking a
gap
year
 just waste students’ time because of
falling
Suggestion
a falling
-behind feeling as they would start and graduate from
college
 a
year
 later than their peers.
However
, a lot of students, in reality, are prone to consider their
college
 time as time-consuming
instead
.
This
 thought is because students at high school tend to focus on tests, scores and a lot of subjects without having a clear own
future
 orientation.
As a result
, their
college
 choice would be much affected by their parents or friends, and after four years, many of them would learn nothing to help their passion or
future
 career. Ergo, students would spend a
gap
year
 thinking without distraction to sharpen their mind about their strength or desire and
then
 to have a precise plan. In conclusion, students should choose to take a
gap
year
 to travel or gain work
experience
 before
college
 to find themselves and enhance their knowledge for their
future
 career.
Submitted by Andy on

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