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Children nowadays spent a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree?

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Today, each and every
child
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 is at a risk of receiving poor education on account of television as it has become a primary source of
information
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 rather than books. I strongly, agree that a book is
irreplacable
impossible to replace
irreplaceable
 and its in-depth knowledge can never be equated with
information
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 imparted via
TV
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.
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, a
TV
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 has become mandatory in every household. Owing to that, children are exposed to it at
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 an extent that they are addicted towards cartoons, movies or other channels which
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 profusely distract them from studying and inculcating the habit of reading books comprehending them. Meanwhile, they are using the television as a primary source of
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,
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 resulting in poor intellectual and holistic development of a
child
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.
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, studies have shown that 80% of children tend to complete reading their school books in front of LED, just for the sake of grades, thereby they gain zero knowledge that leads them to become a less educated one.
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, I believe that a
TV
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 acts as an extra source of
information
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 to see visuals of biopics, documentaries, animals, languages etc.But only a book can give you in-depth knowledge of the subject.
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, if a
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 wants to choose surgeon as a career, he will succeed in becoming one until he reads the relevant books and build a foundation of his chosen career, despite watching tons of surgery videos.
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, only by watching
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,
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it is impossible to pass school and become an intellectual.
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, I agree to an extent that, television will always be pale in comparison to books with regards to providing quality education.
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, in order to wane the effects of
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 on a
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, it is imperative to allocate strict watching hours by the parents.
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