Children nowadays spent a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well educated today. To what extent do you agree?

Today, each and every
child
is at a risk of receiving poor education on account of television as it has become a primary source of
information
rather than books. I strongly, agree that a book is
irreplacable
impossible to replace
irreplaceable
and its in-depth knowledge can never be equated with
information
imparted via
TV
.
Firstly
, a
TV
has become mandatory in every household. Owing to that, children are exposed to it at
such
an extent that they are addicted towards cartoons, movies or other channels which
then
profusely distract them from studying and inculcating the habit of reading books comprehending them. Meanwhile, they are using the television as a primary source of
information
,
consequently
resulting in poor intellectual and holistic development of a
child
.
In addition
, studies have shown that 80% of children tend to complete reading their school books in front of LED, just for the sake of grades, thereby they gain zero knowledge that leads them to become a less educated one.
Secondly
, I believe that a
TV
acts as an extra source of
information
to see visuals of biopics, documentaries, animals, languages etc.But only a book can give you in-depth knowledge of the subject.
For instance
, if a
child
wants to choose surgeon as a career, he will succeed in becoming one until he reads the relevant books and build a foundation of his chosen career, despite watching tons of surgery videos.
In addition
, only by watching
tv
,
Accept space
,
it is impossible to pass school and become an intellectual.
Therefore
, I agree to an extent that, television will always be pale in comparison to books with regards to providing quality education.
Hence
, in order to wane the effects of
TV
on a
child
, it is imperative to allocate strict watching hours by the parents.
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