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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their countries. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?

Global
tourism
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 has certainly become a prevalent phenomenon. Many individuals think that foreign
tourism
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 causes negative effects on their countries, particularly the residents of those places. Some issues related to environmental pollution and threats to traditional customs would be prime reasons for
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 negative attitudes towards international
travelers
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. In order to placate these attitudes, governments could introduce regulations and policies to manage global
tourism
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. International
tourists
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 have a harmful influence on the environment, causing degradation. It has continuously been noticed that some
tourists
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 throw trash in their surroundings irresponsibly, which increases the amount of litter everywhere, despite all attempts to reduce waste produced by the local community.
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 leads to water, air, and soil contamination.
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, foreign visitors are often criticized for a lack of respect for traditional customs and indigenous practices of host countries. In the fact that many visitors are careless and insensitive about the emotions and beliefs of local communities.
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, some foreign
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 wear inappropriate clothes when they visit pagodas and temples, which leads to some negative attitudes and irritation from the local public.
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, some different measures could be implemented to improve the situation. In terms of local residents, the government should explain to them the advantages of international
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 which
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 an enormous contribution to the economic development of many countries. It must be acknowledged that
tourism
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 creates many job opportunities in service industries,
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 their consumption of foods, souvenirs, and accommodations brings in large amounts of income to local people. These aspects should be more publicized, which may go some way towards reducing tensions.
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, the government should raise awareness among foreigners through different media or provide them with local cultural information documents, and
tourists
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 should be encouraged to get rid of rubbish correctly and to pay more attention to their clothing when visiting tourist destinations.
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, the inhospitable attitude that some local people have for global visitors can be explained by many factors.
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, in my opinion, the government’s involvement is essential to change these negative feelings, by citing various benefits of international
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 to their inhabitants and increasing awareness levels among
tourists
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 in order to protect local habitats.

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The main points are well-developed and supported with relevant reasons.
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The essay addresses both parts of the question, identifying reasons for negative attitudes towards international tourism and proposing solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • cultural preservation
  • economic disparity
  • local communities
  • environmental impact
  • overcrowding
  • infrastructure
  • responsible tourist
  • revenue distribution
  • marketing campaign
  • community engagement
  • littering
  • overuse of resources
  • cultural appreciation
  • health risks
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