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In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
I have nothing to say about
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 problem as there are not any troubles with the capacity of the roads in our city.
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, I am going to write and explain some advantages and disadvantages of the system, when people should be taxed in entering the city centre.
Body paragraph 1
It is clear that an increase in the number of automobiles can contribute to the appearance of traffic problems
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 as traffic congestion and even car accidents at rush hours. The reduction in its quantity due to taxation encourages manifestation of positive effects, as well as traffic jams ,are likely to occur less frequently.
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,
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 policy
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 is possible to prevent environmental pollutions in extensive cities over the world.
Body paragraph 2
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, in order to reduce the number of private cars, there are better ways to improve the quality of public transport. Not many inhabitances of cities are expected to practice the use of
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 transportation, as it is not the most convenient and the cleanest way to commute to the work or to the school on a daily basis.
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, if governments replace the old buses on new once and enhance the schedule of them, I think, the use of cars will immediately decrease.
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, there is an average 1 car on the one family,
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the quantity of it would be reduced if there were more footpaths and squares for walking and cycling.
Conclusion
From what has been discussed above here should be drawn a conclusion that
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 policy is meaningfulness and does not have benefits, which overweight disadvantages and the top alternative, a decision is just increased the rate of public transport and their services.

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