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You and your friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were extremely dissatisfied with the experience. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Explain the reason for the celebration Give details of your visit to the restaurant Say what you would like the restaurant to do

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, I am writing
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 letter to complain to you about services that we got yesterday. We booked our table to celebrate our graduation party and we both friends were excited to celebrate
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 party for memory. But when we reached a restaurant, our table was not ready and we were told by one of your employees to wait for our turn. Even after giving an order, it took more than half an hour to cook our order and serve.
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, our food dishes came after a long wait and we started to serve and came to know that the taste was unusual and it was not much that cooked well. We had a lot of excitement to celebrate our graduation party and the restaurant ruined it. Later we left the restaurant and went to another place to eat. The service that had been given by your hotel was worse and I would suggest that teach some skill and aptitude to your staff and even hire some trained chef who can make delicious food. Yours faithfully, Ankit
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Your letter covers all the main points in the task prompt well, but you should try to avoid repetition and ensure clarity in your points.
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To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.
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You have explained the reason for the celebration clearly and described the visit in detail.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a logical structure and flows well overall.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite.
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