Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in rural areas. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Most people opine to live in cities and
thinks
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the best place to live. But other believes to live
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countryside areas. In my opinion, both
opitions
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options
have
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own advantages and disadvantages. But I think, advantages are more outweigh of the disadvantages.
Firstly
of
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,f there are many reasons affected to be living in the cities and rural areas.
For example
, work opportunities,
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Education
cost, cost of living,
health
hazards and adaptability. Comparatively, cities having more work opportunities to work in
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multiple
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of businesses, either on a small or a large scale.
Education
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system has lots of variations, in regards
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the cost and standard. Cities education systems are more advanced and apprehensive, rather than countryside living education system has less in demand.
However
, to live in rural areas is
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cheaper than the cities.
On the other hand
, living in cities is more expensive. People need enough earning sources to survive in cities.Those all mentioned factors above made the cities more crowded and polluted. Due to
this
crowed causes of
health
hazards like a lot of
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causes to pollution and pollution causes to
health
like eye strains, other viruses infection and
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breathing
beating
trouble etc.
Also
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rural areas
offers
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limited
varity
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variety
of works, due to
this
concern, many educated people are leaving
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home town and moving to cities, and that's the thing makes the cities more crowded. But
instead
of less population
contryside
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countryside
have less pollution and for the
health
prospect, it is a great option to live. In conclusion, Cities are
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better option to live with more opportunities to live. But I
also
believe that the government should approach more progress in some of the fields in rural areas, so
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people can get some more opportunities to continue their career in home towns.
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