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Computers becoming essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Computers are the most beneficial technology in today's generation. Nowadays having a
computer
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 make lots of work convenient. In
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 the advantages; with the help of computers,the academy lessons can become more understanding because the teachers can show the students some videos, images about a particular topic to help them understand it in detail.
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, having it as a subject in a hall can make them a fast learner as well as benefit them in future.
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, if a student has
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omputer as a compulsory subject in their syllabus they can learn various uses of it from a young age.
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 the disadvantages; the students can get an addict to the
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 and won't read many books which can sometimes affect their grades in the institute.
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, if once they started playing games and they get to know how fun it can be they would get involved in it and would waste their time in just playing indoor.In that case, there would be a great effect on their body and fitness.
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, if a kid keeps playing a game on a
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 for a long time his eyesight can start getting weaker by the days passed.
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,according to my view; there are always advantages and disadvantages to a magnificent technology so, after going through all
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omputer as an essential part of educational lessons can produce amazing results for the future of students as well as the parents. To illustrate, if a kid has learned how to create an excel sheet
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 he can build a file to keep the record of his daily routine or future events.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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