The efficient functioning of society is based on rules and laws. Society would not function well if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that our societies will be in disorder if there
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any rules to regulate people's
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. More people even hold the view that people shouldn'
t
be allowed to do whatever they want to do, which I am consistent with. There may be
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ncreasing number of crimes in the
society
if everyone can do whatever they want without any limitations and punishments. People have unlimited desired to wealth and fame and they tend to get money in an easier way
such
as grabbing from others. In companies, the employees in high positions can lie to others and corrupt public money easily if they are not punished by laws no matter what crimes they made. Gradually, the whole
society
will be difficult to control because companies go bankrupt and people become lazy to earn money by their hands. Even though governments can'
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control
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society
without any rules, too much
also
don'
t
benefit for the development of the whole
society
. There are many businesses that need some freedom of regulations to develop, which contributes to companies' innovation and creation. If there are too many
limititions
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limitations
, like tax laws or criteria of entering the market, companies, especially for start-ups are very difficult to expand their schemes. Due to over-loaded regulations put into start-ups,
for example
, in Shanghai every year half the companies go bankrupt and can'
t
create more jobs for the
society
. These not only
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inancial burden for the
society
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but
also
increase the unemployment of the
society
, which is the basic factor of
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isorder. To sum up, the whole
society
will face
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ig disorder if every individual has rights to do whatever they want to. The most suitable policy is that
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supervising
the
society
in moderate laws and regulations, without too much or too little because
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society
need
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some freedom to create and develop.
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