number of children who drop the scool is increasing in some countries.what are the reasons and solutions to overcome this problem.

Education plays
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vital role in a child's complete development. In some nations,
school
dropouts are increasing and
this
is a matter of concern. In
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we will be discussing the reasons and the possible solutions
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cause. In these days, children's are more surrounded by technologies than
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ook. They are getting distracted with numerous technological resources which diverts them to social media, gaming, online chattings, etc.
This
makes them addicted to
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at home rather than choosing to study in
school
. In my personal experience, one of my
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dropped out
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school
just because he was more interested to do something with music and went to learn the instrument from his
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"Guruji". So, dropping out doesn't
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to the only cause of technology but
also
their personal preferences over something which excites students. Some of the major concerning reasons are - 1. Personal preference - Students these days consider them big enough to take
such
decisions which they don't know, can change their life upside down. They choose to study and indulge in only that creative subject which excites them the most and excludes other subjects choosing
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out
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the
school
. 2. Families instabilities - These days raising children is
also
difficult as couples are increasingly taking divorces at
such
an early age of their relationship which makes a lot more difficult for a children mental health to focus on and compels them to
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from the
school
. Possible solutions to rectify
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are - 1. Prioritising schooling - Parents should compel students to study till
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secondary
school
before choosing any specific stream they're interested in and make them understand the benefits of studying in a
school
. 2. Integrity - A family should always think about the children's future before
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any decisions which can impact or influence his future. They should make
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children understand the importance of education which will help to overcome them every
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of
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life.
Hence
,
school
dropouts can be
diminuted
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dominated
if correct measures can be taken at all levels in the family and in public. Students have to be instructed about the importance
school
has not just only in terms of knowledge but in terms of the experience
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it gives which can be cherished forever.
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