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Some school are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, While other schools have a very relaxed dress code. (What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?)

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Several schools have rules about students must wear
school
uniform
 and image of their children.
However
, some schools do not have rules about
dress
, children can relax about their clothes. From my point of view, having
school
 uniforms are many benefits. Presently, many schools have a lot of rules, but
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 main rule that everyone knows is about dressing. In some countries, schools are very strict about what learners wearing.
However
, schools were not strict about
dress
 code are both drawbacks and benefits. There is a disadvantage
such
 as children will concern about their clothes every day in the morning and they will go to
school
 late and miss classes.
Moreover
, people think that there is an advantage like children can wear everything they want, and it makes students have more confidence.
On the other hand
, schools, where have
school
uniform
 are a lot of advantages because the majority of
school
 in Asia, every
school
 will have rules about
dress
 code and appearance of learners.
Firstly
, if schools have
school
 uniforms, children will not concern what they want to
dress
 today.
Secondly
, when students have accidents, people can suddenly know and help them quickly because people know that people who wear
school
uniform
 just kids.
Lastly
, every
school
 has a few trips, and learners must wear
school
uniform
 because if some children lose, several people will know and bring them to a group of students. To sum up, some schools are strict about
school
uniform
 rule and the appearance of their kids.
Nonetheless
, other schools have relaxed rules and not strict to much about clothes that children wear.
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