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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, a number of
people
 want to pursue
items
 from well-known
brands
.
This
 essay will discuss some reasons behind it and whether it counts as a positive or
a
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negative development. There are a few reasons why
people
 want to buy lots of
items
 from famous
brands
.
To begin
 with, most
people
 have their own personal possessions, some of them believe that by having popular branded
items
 around them can reflect their wealth and levels in the societies effectively. More
people
 would like to get closer to them because of their reflection.
Also
, buying well-known
items
 can be a trendy idea in
the
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society, some
people
 enjoy comparing with others, especially by showing off how rich they are by owning these
brands
.
People
 tend to love the feeling of it so that it causes them to buy more and more
items
 from popular
brands
. In my opinion,
this
 can cause a totally negative development. It can make an invisible distance between rich and poor
people
, or the levels between them.
This
 leads to an even worse situation, which is discrimination. The result of it can be inequality in
the
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society, and the amount of fakeness. Imagine
this
, when most
people
 only love to get closer with wealthy
people
, No healthy relationships will ever exist, if yes, it cannot
last
 for long.
This
also
 causes a toxic atmosphere between the interaction of humans, surroundings and everything. In conclusion, I understand the reasons why a number of
people
 pursue
items
 from famous
brands
.
However
, I strongly disagree with it because of how huge a negative development
it
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can be
as a result
.
Therefore
, I hope these occasions will disappear more in the future.
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