IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any examples from your own experience or knowledge

#levels #youth #crime #cities #world
Nowadays, the rate of crimes committed by young
people
 has increased dramatically in many different countries.
This
 essay will discuss the
problems
 that involved teenagers and
also
 suggest some solutions. The main problem with youth crime among young
people
 is that they have
easily
Replace the word
easy
show examples
access
Replace the word
accessible
show examples
 on the Internet. When young
people
 use it they can watch violent video on several
websites
.
As a result
, they may start to follow
this
 bad behaviour in their life.
For example
, they can bully their peers and start to thief schoolbag, electronic devices, book at school. Another factor is that many parents spend a lot of their time at work.
Consequently
, children may go out all day with their friends and try some illegal acts to show off that they are better than others.
However
, there are solutions to these
problems
. One of the solutions to the problem discussed above is to block
websites
 which promote war and violence. If these
websites
 are blocked on young
people
’s computers they won’t become irresponsible or impolite. Another possible solution could be that parents can enrol their children in sports activities when they are working.
This
 way, young
people
 enjoy themselves in a team and not on the streets. To conclude, there are some
problems
 associated with the increase
of
Verify preposition usage
in
show examples
 the number of youth crime. Internet and family are factors
c
Add a pronoun
that
show examples
an lead young
people
 to do worse activities.
However
, these
problems
 can be solved by blocking some
websites
 and encourage children to go to the sports centre.
Submitted by marino.ilenia1995 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
What to do next:
Look at other essays: